Thursday, April 06, 2006

Living in Your Head

Living in Your Head

I watch as you cradle her,
your arms frail and ghost-like,
holding her as if she was your own.

Nobody can tell what you are thinking.
You are locked away in your own little world.
Someone has thrown away the key.
It is lost in the dark depths of time.

Are you happy in there?
I wish I knew.

You sit for hours
rocking her gently,
hushing the voiceless child
into an endless slumber.
Never tiring.
Never giving up.

The things you must have seen!
Those memories locked
deep inside your mind,
unable to escape,
like prisoners
held against their will.

You look straight through me
but there’s still life in your eyes.
That much I know.


At April 07, 2006 7:46 PM, Anonymous Jimmy said...

I like this poem it makes me think of mirrors
that the subject is in a hall of mirrors
with their personality and thoughts
reflecting back on them they cannot find the door to escape because it is also a mirror stragely the door deceives them by randomly changing it's position in the room

At April 07, 2006 10:22 PM, Blogger duffy said...

I totally agree with Jimmy. Good use of expression and imagary.
Ps - I also agree with Jimmy on the whole commenting thing. Comment on your comments and if you don't/do agree with someone, let us know. I think it woul help

At April 07, 2006 10:33 PM, Blogger ThePoet said...

The poem is actually quite unrelated to mirrors but it is an interesting comment - I had never thought of that, or approaching it from that angle. It does take on a whole new perspective!

I'm glad that you liked it though, and I'm unsure whether I should reveal the true subject of the poem as it might spoil the ideas you already have in your head! :)

But thank you!!

At April 08, 2006 12:01 PM, Anonymous Jimmy said...

Is it about a doll perhaps an old toy?

At April 08, 2006 9:56 PM, Anonymous Jimmy said...

I wrote this today and haven't revised it I'd appreciate a comment from you on it.

Note for Liz

Your family sized tin of tomato soup
I ate it along with some bread
(you need more bread)
I shared it with Jo
we were hungry after making love
Sorry,to have to break it to you like this
but as we once agreed in a conversation
about former-boyfriends/girlfriends
there is no easy way
I found some money
in a tin behind the tomato soup tin
'Craig's Birthday'was written on a sticker
as it's near my birthday-I took it
let me know if you want it back
I should have some money next week
We're going out to the pub
the one with the karaoke (Jo's idea)
you know how she morphs into a karaoke Diva
after a couple of drinks
I left your keys with Bill at 2/3
he was the only person in
you know Bill
the one you say leers at you
and gives you the creeps
I'm moving in with Jo
I'll get my stuff tomorrow
could you leave the keys with someone
if you can't or don't want to be in
this one set of keys is a pain
if I find the set I lost
I'll give you them back

Chin up Babe

Love Craig

At April 09, 2006 4:52 PM, Blogger Maria said...

I was visualizing a grandmother who is striken with Alzheimer's, sitting on a rocking chair whilst putting her granddaughter to sleep.

It feels so much like it!

At April 09, 2006 10:25 PM, Blogger duffy said...

Jimmy - I like your poem because it falls into a somewhat *unusual* style. It is actually quite humerous - was this intended?

At April 09, 2006 11:13 PM, Blogger ThePoet said...

Maria - I'm really quite happy as you have got the subject of my poem almost completely accurate!! I hope Duffy didn't give you a hint! Heh :)

Jimmy - the poem is somewhat unusual, and reads to me like a shopping list for some reason. I can't put my finger on why though, just the initial thought that springs to mind.

At April 10, 2006 2:47 PM, Anonymous Jimmy said...

Thank you -ThePoet- is there anyone who has never had a shopping list.There is probably more agonizing over shopping lists
(especially at Christmas)than any poem.

At April 10, 2006 6:58 PM, Blogger Maria said...

Oh, not at all. Duffy didn't give me any hints ;)

At April 12, 2006 3:37 PM, Blogger duffy said...

I haven't said anything to anyone, my fair friend!

Waiting in anticipation for the next venture

At April 13, 2006 6:03 PM, Anonymous virgin1on1 said...

wow sweets... gran...


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